题目内容：

纠正英文文法错误
这是我一阿姨给签证官写的信,用来申请她父母去美国探亲的.我觉得写的不错,就是由点语法上的问题.
Dear Visa Officer,
This is XXX from XXX,USA.I am the oldest daughter of the two nonimmigrant visa applicants.I am writing this letter to state my family status in the United States in order to assist you with the process of my parents’ visa applications.My husband became a U.S.permanent resident in 2004,while my daughter and I became permanent residents in 2005.My daughter is currently enrolled in University of XX as a freshman with a full-ride scholarship.My husband and I both work in restaurants.We have a single house and two personal vehicles.All three of us work which ensures a stable family income.After paying the monthly mortgage and the utility bills we are still able to deposit money into the bank.Therefore,we are certain that we can provide monetary need,transportation,and housing during my parents’ temporary stay in the U.S.
Because the nature of our occupations,we do not have the time to go back to China and visit my parents.My family really misses them and would like them to come and visit us during the summer.They are getting old now; this might be their only time to visit the U.S.If they could come,we plan to have a family trip to XXX and visit some of the tourist attractions.
Again,I hope this letter can help you with your decision making.
Sincerely,
XXXX

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总体来说很不错,基本上都没什么大问题.就只是几处语法方面有点不太恰当.
第二段第7行 “All three of us work”中all 跟three冲突了,就只能用一个.
第二段开头“Because the nature of our occupations”应该是“Because of the nature of our occupations”
第二段第三行“They are getting old now”,我觉得换成“They are getting older and older now”效果更好.该行的最后“If they could come”有点中国式英语的味道,建议用“If they come”就好.